First time, how did I do?

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She started biting my neck as I teased her clothes with my fingers and going inside a little bit, her moaning louder with each entry into her now dripping vagina, her hand moves down my chest and grips onto my solid hard dick, I rub her clit faster as she strokes me, moaning louder still, I decide it's my time to shine, I remover her and lay her on the bed and wrap her legs around my head as my tongue bar gently touches her clit, she squirms a little, her body screaming at me to keep going, I rub my tongue gently up and down her vagina and my tongue bar rubs ul her clit making her moans more intense, she pushes my head so I go deeper, pushing my tongue deep inside and let my bar massage her clit, forcing my head down and moaning louder I go faster, I decide it's not enough so I get her up and make her sit in my face and ride me, as my thumbs rub over her firm nipples, she rides slowly at first then faster and faster, almost shouting with pleasure, her juices running into my mouth and down my chin, I push her boob's together as I'm massaging her nipples and eating up her juices, she puts her hands on my stomach and pushes her self forward and backwards faster and faster, constantly moaning loudly, my dick like steel now, after awhile she slows down and then stops, all her sweet juices over my mouth chin and chest, makes me so hard, she moves down my body kissing gently and teasing me until she reaches my steel rod and teases it with her hand then slowly puts her mouth just over the head and washes her tongue over it, I let out a little groan, she nose I want her so she moves her mouth deeper until she swallows all of it, and rubbing her tongue over it, she slowly pulls her mouth up making me moan some more, then slides back down faster this time, I can't take it, let out a huge moan, she gives me everything, putting her mouth over it and moving up and down slowly at first then faster and faster until I'm moaning loudly, I grab her hair and keep pulling and pushing her head, she's going so fast now I moan and she moans with me, until I can't take no more, I explode into her mouth and she eats it all up and keeps going up and down til she has eaten it all, then gets off me and I stand up and she gets on her knees and starts sucking again, I moan, my loudest yet, she tell me come over my face, I put out of her mouth and her hand wraps around my still solid nob and moves up and down fast until I come again this time my juices exploding over her face, just to be sure she sucks again and licks the head, still covered, when her job is done she stands up and leaves.

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Sorry autocorrect 😅

[TerraInfirma]

First time what, writing erotic fiction?

[Ga****]

I would run away

[Deleted Member]

Thanks then

[Na****]

My guy, learn sentence and paragraph structure.

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Just now, NaturalScorpio said:

My guy, learn sentence and paragraph structure.

Read the first comment....autocorrect

[Na****]

What autocorrect? There is only a single use of end punctuation in that whole post.

[Th****]

23 minutes ago, bristolguyBS2 said:

Read the first comment....autocorrect

Autocorrect doesn't prevent the use of punctuation and paragraphs; unless you are too lazy to do any of that yourself. Then don't go blaming autocorrect 🙄

[Di****]

This needs a lot less work than you’re thinking. One point though you say the small victory is gonna ***t your own face and I like no boy no. But then I get you switched off to this poor ladies face and I think that’s a big turn off. Objection by Mr Boner in ma pants I just don’t like it. Is me not being nice to a really nice lady who just bjed me real real good. 😊

[ag****]

Did she even cum???

[Br****]

I gotta say this was an intense ride! The nerdy English writing perfectionist in me didn’t like the continuous rambling with the randomly placed commas… but then I read it as the raving passionate thoughts and descriptions I thought it would be, and artistically it made sense to write it that way. Good job.

But seriously… sentence structure… punctuation… complete thoughts…

Do better.