Forbidden Fruit

[Qu****]

I wrote this a while back but never had the courage to post it before. It’s the first chapter of a story I’ve been putting together so wanted some feedback to decide whether I carry on or not.

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She always knew there was something dark about her sexual imagination, not the usual run of the mill fantasies about being whisked away by a tall handsome stranger.

Hers took on a far more twisted and sadistic nature which quite surprised her, as she was as a rule, an average woman on first appearances.

She’d often wondered what it would be like to feel the sting of a flogger on her bum, or the *** of having her nipples pulled and twisted. 

Her sex life, like herself was pretty average - no real excitement, a Saturday or Sunday (sometimes both on bank holidays) quickie was as good as it got. Not much foreplay or kink of any kind.

That was all about to change ....

The discovery of porn websites had come to her fairly late in life, with the iPhone she was able to access material that made her wet at the thought of having things done to her that had always been confined and hidden in her darkest thoughts. She was drawn to bdsm more than anything and the very thought of being restrained and fucked was intoxicating. The more she thought about it the more she knew it was an experience she must have!

But how, where could she go to even find people to talk to about this? 

 

If she could find other people to talk to about her kinky side, who knows, something may come of it. Imagine if she could actually experience some of these things! 

So one boring Sunday afternoon she stumbled upon a website that seemed perfect for her to dip her toe in the world of bdsm. 

She set up a profile and sat back and waited,not expecting anyone to even notice her arrival. 

To say she was surprised by the amount of messages she received was an understatement- from the downright disgusting, flattering and most of all positive.

She began chatting to complete strangers about her most intimate and kinky fantasies and it felt perfectly normal! At last she’d found people like her 

After a few weeks of chatting she found a guy that she arranged to meet - a stranger, in a hotel. It felt sordid but so exciting 

She met him in the bar and they had a couple of drinks  to steady her nerves. 

When she was ready he took her to the hotel room. 

She walked in and immediately saw an array of sex toys lined up on the king size bed. Some of which she’d never seen before.

He told her to get on her knees infront of him and put the blindfold on that he’d given her then take his already hard cock in her mouth and hold it there - no sucking until he said. 

She did as she was told. A man she’d only met in person 30 minutes previously 

He instructed her to remove all her clothing, without taking his cock from her already dribbling mouth. If she did so, there would be a punishment of 5 hits on each nipple with a crop!!!

How could she do this? He had told her previously to not wear a button through top so she had to lift her jumper over her head.

It dawned on her - crafty swine.

So the cock came out of her mouth and she heard him chuckle.

Once undressed he told her to slowly lick his cock like it was the best ice lolly she’d ever tasted and whilst doing that, to play with her nipples to get them nice and erect ready for the crop. The thought of it made her wet.

He moaned as she licked and worked her tongue up and down his shaft. 

He grabbed her hair and ***d his cock deep in her mouth, making her gag. He started to fuck her mouth, slow and steady at first, then faster, not giving her chance to catch her breath. 

Once satisfied he’d fucked her mouth sufficiently, he told her to stand by the bed with her hands behind her head.

Still blindfolded, He walked around her, stroking her arm, her back, across her shoulders, sending shivers up and down her spine. She went to speak but he quickly put a finger to her lips to silence her 

Walking over to the bed he picked up the crop and began to tap it on the palm of his hand. 

Her senses were heightened and every sound was filled with anticipation. Oh god, what was he going to do??

She shuddered as she felt the crop glide lightly  over her erect nipples, her pussy immediately moist. The crop travelled down her arm and onto her hip then slowly traced itself between her legs. The thrill of its touch made her pussy clench with excitement and longing.

As the crop made its way back towards her nipples, he whispered in her ear 

‘Are you ready for your punishment you naughty girl?’ With that, he gave the tip of her nipple a hard smack with the crop. It made her cry out - more in shock than ***, although it did sting. His mouth engulfed a nipple, sucking hard then flicking his tongue around it, then more sucking. It felt so much more intense after the crop 

4 more followed, then 5 on the other nipple, by this time they were stinging quite badly and very sensitive. 

Being blindfolded was a new experience for her but she was loving the way it made all her other senses tingle 

She could tell he was stood close to her, she could hear him breathing. He stroked her arm and then guided her to the edge of the bed and told her to lean forward and rest her elbows on the bed, legs apart. 

He traces  his finger from her clit, gently parting her pussy lips and slowly inserts it deep inside her 

She gasps as he starts to finger fuck her slowly, taking his time, savouring her wetness.

He tells her to open her mouth and he puts his fingers across her lips, making them moist with her juice. She licks it off - savouring how sweet she tastes.

She feels him press up against her and rub his hard cock between her legs, teasing her clit with the tip then rubbing it around the entrance to her pussy but never entering.

It begins to build up a longing in her - ‘why doesn’t he just fuck me’!?

He asks her ‘do you want my cock’?

She replies ‘yes’

‘No, you address me as sir. Do you want my cock or not?’

‘Yes please sir’ she replies sheepishly 

He begins easing his stiff cock inside her. Gently at first, feeling her pussy grip around him, he starts to fuck her - hard. 

His balls slap against her clit as he thrust deeper inside her 

He reaches forward and grabs her hair, pulling her head back, making her back arch 

She never realised how much she enjoyed rough sex - until now.

Thoughts raced through her head as he fucked her harder, giver her ass a slap with every thrust, feeling herself get closer and closer to orgasm 

How had she gone so long unsatisfied in her sex life and what else was there out there for her to discover? 

Maybe this man could show her these things - take her to places she’d only dreamt about. Only time would tell............

[Deleted Member]

I recognise part of this story, it good to see you continue it! It's very good and look forward to reading more! 🙂🙂

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  11 minutes ago, SirRob999 said:

I recognise part of this story, it good to see you continue it! It's very good and look forward to reading more! 🙂🙂

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You should do @SirRob999 you made me write it as a task ‘sir’ 😏

I’m just going to take it further as I think there’s a lot more to this (I hope)

[BigPolly]

Made me smile as I think back to the early days of your journey 😊😊😊 xx

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  3 minutes ago, BigPolly said:

Made me smile as I think back to the early days of your journey 😊😊😊 xx

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And you were there for me @BigPolly when I needed advice, thank you 😘

[li****]

Wow!!!! Brilliant Hun 😍😍 can't wait to read more!!

[BigPolly]

  31 minutes ago, Queenie63 said:

And you were there for me @BigPolly when I needed advice, thank you 😘

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😊😘xxx

[Deleted Member]

Good work Queenie63 you should continue. Ps try to stay in one tense if you can. But that's splitting hairs.

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  6 hours ago, purrfectpanther said:

Good work Queenie63 you should continue. Ps try to stay in one tense if you can. But that's splitting hairs.

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Thanks purrfect, I do tend to forget that. If that’s your only critique then I’m happy 😊

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  7 hours ago, Lilmonster said:

Wow!!!! Brilliant Hun 😍😍 can't wait to read more!!

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Thanks LilM, lots more to the story. Things are just hotting up 😅😘

[Ma****]

  11 hours ago, Queenie63 said:

I wrote this a while back but never had the courage to post it before. It’s the first chapter of a story I’ve been putting together so wanted some feedback to decide whether I carry on or not.

........

She always knew there was something dark about her sexual imagination, not the usual run of the mill fantasies about being whisked away by a tall handsome stranger.

Hers took on a far more twisted and sadistic nature which quite surprised her, as she was as a rule, an average woman on first appearances.

She’d often wondered what it would be like to feel the sting of a flogger on her bum, or the *** of having her nipples pulled and twisted. 

Her sex life, like herself was pretty average - no real excitement, a Saturday or Sunday (sometimes both on bank holidays) quickie was as good as it got. Not much foreplay or kink of any kind.

That was all about to change ....

The discovery of porn websites had come to her fairly late in life, with the iPhone she was able to access material that made her wet at the thought of having things done to her that had always been confined and hidden in her darkest thoughts. She was drawn to bdsm more than anything and the very thought of being restrained and fucked was intoxicating. The more she thought about it the more she knew it was an experience she must have!

But how, where could she go to even find people to talk to about this? 

 

If she could find other people to talk to about her kinky side, who knows, something may come of it. Imagine if she could actually experience some of these things! 

So one boring Sunday afternoon she stumbled upon a website that seemed perfect for her to dip her toe in the world of bdsm. 

She set up a profile and sat back and waited,not expecting anyone to even notice her arrival. 

To say she was surprised by the amount of messages she received was an understatement- from the downright disgusting, flattering and most of all positive.

She began chatting to complete strangers about her most intimate and kinky fantasies and it felt perfectly normal! At last she’d found people like her 

After a few weeks of chatting she found a guy that she arranged to meet - a stranger, in a hotel. It felt sordid but so exciting 

She met him in the bar and they had a couple of drinks  to steady her nerves. 

When she was ready he took her to the hotel room. 

She walked in and immediately saw an array of sex toys lined up on the king size bed. Some of which she’d never seen before.

He told her to get on her knees infront of him and put the blindfold on that he’d given her then take his already hard cock in her mouth and hold it there - no sucking until he said. 

She did as she was told. A man she’d only met in person 30 minutes previously 

He instructed her to remove all her clothing, without taking his cock from her already dribbling mouth. If she did so, there would be a punishment of 5 hits on each nipple with a crop!!!

How could she do this? He had told her previously to not wear a button through top so she had to lift her jumper over her head.

It dawned on her - crafty swine.

So the cock came out of her mouth and she heard him chuckle.

Once undressed he told her to slowly lick his cock like it was the best ice lolly she’d ever tasted and whilst doing that, to play with her nipples to get them nice and erect ready for the crop. The thought of it made her wet.

He moaned as she licked and worked her tongue up and down his shaft. 

He grabbed her hair and ***d his cock deep in her mouth, making her gag. He started to fuck her mouth, slow and steady at first, then faster, not giving her chance to catch her breath. 

Once satisfied he’d fucked her mouth sufficiently, he told her to stand by the bed with her hands behind her head.

Still blindfolded, He walked around her, stroking her arm, her back, across her shoulders, sending shivers up and down her spine. She went to speak but he quickly put a finger to her lips to silence her 

Walking over to the bed he picked up the crop and began to tap it on the palm of his hand. 

Her senses were heightened and every sound was filled with anticipation. Oh god, what was he going to do??

She shuddered as she felt the crop glide lightly  over her erect nipples, her pussy immediately moist. The crop travelled down her arm and onto her hip then slowly traced itself between her legs. The thrill of its touch made her pussy clench with excitement and longing.

As the crop made its way back towards her nipples, he whispered in her ear 

‘Are you ready for your punishment you naughty girl?’ With that, he gave the tip of her nipple a hard smack with the crop. It made her cry out - more in shock than ***, although it did sting. His mouth engulfed a nipple, sucking hard then flicking his tongue around it, then more sucking. It felt so much more intense after the crop 

4 more followed, then 5 on the other nipple, by this time they were stinging quite badly and very sensitive. 

Being blindfolded was a new experience for her but she was loving the way it made all her other senses tingle 

She could tell he was stood close to her, she could hear him breathing. He stroked her arm and then guided her to the edge of the bed and told her to lean forward and rest her elbows on the bed, legs apart. 

He traces  his finger from her clit, gently parting her pussy lips and slowly inserts it deep inside her 

She gasps as he starts to finger fuck her slowly, taking his time, savouring her wetness.

He tells her to open her mouth and he puts his fingers across her lips, making them moist with her juice. She licks it off - savouring how sweet she tastes.

She feels him press up against her and rub his hard cock between her legs, teasing her clit with the tip then rubbing it around the entrance to her pussy but never entering.

It begins to build up a longing in her - ‘why doesn’t he just fuck me’!?

He asks her ‘do you want my cock’?

She replies ‘yes’

‘No, you address me as sir. Do you want my cock or not?’

‘Yes please sir’ she replies sheepishly 

He begins easing his stiff cock inside her. Gently at first, feeling her pussy grip around him, he starts to fuck her - hard. 

His balls slap against her clit as he thrust deeper inside her 

He reaches forward and grabs her hair, pulling her head back, making her back arch 

She never realised how much she enjoyed rough sex - until now.

Thoughts raced through her head as he fucked her harder, giver her ass a slap with every thrust, feeling herself get closer and closer to orgasm 

How had she gone so long unsatisfied in her sex life and what else was there out there for her to discover? 

Maybe this man could show her these things - take her to places she’d only dreamt about. Only time would tell............

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yes, very good #queenie, and I think you should tell more,

[Qu****]

  4 minutes ago, wilkie said:

yes, very good #queenie, and I think you should tell more,

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Thanks Wilkie, watch this space 😁😘

[Ma****]

  1 hour ago, Queenie63 said:

Thanks Wilkie, watch this space 😁😘

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oh I will be, with bated breath, what ever that actually means, lol

[Deleted Member]

I got through a minute.... 

 

[Qu****]

  4 minutes ago, DaddysKitte-2968 said:

I got through a minute.... 

 

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Was it that bad 😱

[Deleted Member]

  Just now, Queenie63 said:

Was it that bad 😱

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Sorry hunny, it was hard to read. It's great that you're doing this, maybe something audio would be better?

[Qu****]

  1 minute ago, DaddysKitte-2968 said:

Sorry hunny, it was hard to read. It's great that you're doing this, maybe something audio would be better?

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Thanks for the feedback - just so I know, what was hard to read?

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It was poorly structured grammatically, so trying to understand the sentences was very frustrating. Erotica needs to flow and bring the reader into the story...

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  11 minutes ago, DaddysKitte-2968 said:

It was poorly structured grammatically, so trying to understand the sentences was very frustrating. Erotica needs to flow and bring the reader into the story...

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Ok, I’ll take a look at it. It’s a first effort and I’ve never written anything before so any opinion is useful 

[ca****]

Must be a subjective thing - as I took a while before i got round to reading it. So read the comments below - and DaddysKite critique - so i did not know what to expect. Just read it and i think it was marvellous ;) Greta story and account. ;)

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  4 minutes ago, callipygian said:

Must be a subjective thing - as I took a while before i got round to reading it. So read the comments below - and DaddysKite critique - so i did not know what to expect. Just read it and i think it was marvellous ;) Greta story and account. ;)

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Thanks G - appreciate that 😘